The elephant was the biggest thing I had ever seen and I started to get closer to it and I was going to get even closer until I saw a baby one.
I only saw it because we were out camping and it was outside in the massive tent.
I was going to wake up the little one but then I saw a CHEETAH…
It was asleep and I was just FREAKING OUT and it was only CAKE????
I thought it was going to be a trap because there was a net over the top of it.
Then I threw a stick at it and the net came flying down and then I had the chance to eat the cake.
Then I was in the middle of eating THE BEST CAKE EVER and then I mum woke up.
“ Just a dream ” I said to I whispered to myself.
The end...
We can see you were working hard on your writing. Maybe check your capitals and check it makes sense to improve this piece of writing. We think you described a cheetah and elephant when you included them in your story because characters make the writing more interesting.
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